It was a sunny Saturday afternoon, Jane and Mary decided to go to East Coast park to rent two bicycles. They went to the bicycle kiosk to rent two bicycles.
They ride their bicycle along the bicycle track. Two men were fishing by the sea. There were some people resting under the hut.
A few minutes later, Mary's bicycle tyre was flat. Jane asked Mary to sit behind her back of the seat and pull her bicycle. Jane will ride the bicycle to the bicycle kiosk.
2 comments:
Saturday should be sat....(no cap).
they want to cycle in east coast. they went to the bicycle kiosk to rent their bicycle.
you should not repeat the renting of bicycle.
overall, i do see improvement in sentense construction but please be careful on the tense (eg. there was two hens.... should be "were" right.
happy writing!!!
daddy
Hi Mr. Teo, this is Danica here. I hope you remember me. Was Crystal's English tutor for a period of time. Just wondering, do you still have the tuition agent's contact with you? Somehow, I misplaced her contact, and now, I'm in urgent need of it. Would appreciate it if you could e-mail the contact to me at danicachoo@hotmail.com
Once again, thanks alot.
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