"Help me!Save Me!"shouted John.
A few minutes ago,John and his parents,Mr and Mrs Lim brought John out boating because he had passed his examinations with flying colours. When they reached the middle of the sea,Mr Lim handed Mrs Lim and John each a life jacket.
As John find wearing life jacket was very troublesome,he threw it overboard lifting his legs as well. Mr and Mrs Lim were busy wearing their life jacket and did not notice what John was doing.
"Splat!" they heard a loud splash.
Mrs Lim's face turned as white as sheet when she saw John struggling in the water. Mr Lim told himself to calm down. Mr Lim have a phobia of water but when he saw John struggling he immediately jumped into the sea and pulled John back into the boat safely.
Once aboard,Mrs Lim fetched each of them a towel to dry themselves. Mr Lim's face turned as red as a tomato as he was very angry. He gave John a tough scolding. Mr Lim also threatened to confiscate his remote control toy car that was given to him as a reward for doing well in his studies.
John regretted misbehaving.
1 comment:
many good phrases being used in your story, good attempt.
some points to notes, still a handful of grammer and spelling mistake, story was also pretty straight foward.
keep it up!!!
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